On Outlines and Red Herrings – A Guest Post by DB Grady

Welcome to week 3 of the Red Planet Noir blog tour. This is also the first week that Red Planet Noir is available for the Kindle — something I’ve been eagerly anticipating — and I hope everyone with a craving for a good mystery and snappy one-liners will consider it.

In Alison’s last post, she described the importance of properly staging a scene, of metaphorically “blocking” before putting pen to paper. She describes this technique in matters of murder and romance. And while I’ve never written a love scene — and God willing, never will — her advice is spot-on for crime fiction. (As a general rule, Alison is always right, and don’t you forget it.)

Outlining has garnered a bad reputation among writers for reasons good and bad. Most of the snake oil “Write A Bestseller in Thirty Days!” books recommend it. That’s reason enough to shun the practice. Some writers believe is delays the actual (fun!) practice of writing, and adds a bit of staleness to prose. And Stephen King hates it, which is pretty much the final word on the matter.

I like outlines.

Like most authors, I wrote my book while working a 9 to 5. Like most authors, I like a good solid block of time to work. And when time is at a premium, nothing is more jarring than flying through a page of prose only to hit a mental bear trap.

“I’m going on a vacation next week.”

“Where?”

“Illinois.”

“Chicago?”

“No, the capital.”

“I thought Chicago was the capital.”

“No, it’s—” ???

Experienced writers would recommend adding filler text and driving though, but my brain doesn’t work like that. I need to know Springfield is the capital. I can’t rest until the details are right.

Red Planet Noir is a whodunnit. Until the last 10 pages, it’s not clear who the killer is, but the novel is filled with hints along the way. An intrepid reader can play amateur detective with every page, because every page builds the case or adds something new to chew on.

Really brilliant crime writers — the kind who smoke pipes and have the words “New York Times bestselling author” precede their names — can do this in their heads.

I can not. I’m just a normal guy from the Earth planet.

Before writing my book, I drafted a five page, handwritten outline. It didn’t detail plot, exactly — it never delved into feelings or motivations — but it hit the major settings and key events. The dots, you might say, to connect. To give a made up example:

Restaurant
* Greasy spoon
* Notices steak knives serrated
* Remembers victim was stabbed with serrated knife.
* Chats with waitress.
* Waitress hated victim.

This was invaluable for several reasons. Because it was important to engage the reader in the investigation, I wanted to throw red herrings and clues the mix. And once the outline was complete, I had a nice picture of a sprawling mystery, and the ability to make mischief. Circle one character’s name: “Lover.” Scribble in the margins of a different scene: “Fingerprint.” Somewhere else, still: “How did he know where the body was found?”

Next, I bought a multi-color pack of index cards, and transcribed each scene onto a card. Here, I added a bit more color. Like many writers, I keep a pen at hand at all times. Whenever a funny exchange or quirky detail or brilliant revelation strikes, I jot it down for later filing and usage.

The index cards are great for pinning the tail on the donkey, so to speak. This funny bit of dialogue I scribbled while driving to work last week would go great in this scene. This interesting tick would work nicely for this character. This is a really cool metaphor — and here’s where I’ll use it.

After filling the index cards, I move on through to the end of the story. It’s a very useful practice for spotting glaring holes in logic. “But if the butler did it, he’d have to have been in two places at once… I need to rethink this.” Or whatever.

Erudite writers with brains the size of planets will scoff at my amateurish reliance on notes, but it works for me. I think of the outline and the index cards as assembling a prefabricated Christmas tree. There are no lights, no ornaments, no personality or motifs. It’s just the nuts-and-bolts details. Because when I sit down to write, I want to make full use of every available minute. I want to be productive. And nothing is less productive than ending a chapter and saying, “Now what?”

Speaking personally, the prose can’t flow — the humor and the sadness and the tension — if my logical mind is fully engaged in a dilemma. I can’t be Kirk and Spock at the same time. But by working from cards, there are no dilemmas. I’m rarely concerned about missing a critical element, because that element is jotted on yardstick, waiting to be crossed off. It also frees me, as a writer, to go off on tangents without fear of losing the trail.

I can decorate the tree without worrying whether or not there’s a branch for the star.

Outlining also gets a negative reputation because many people go overboard with it. If you’re on page 20 of an outline for an 80,000 word book, you’ve probably got too much detail, and run the risk of killing the spontaneity. Treasure maps don’t list barometric pressure and windchill factors of the desert at night. It doesn’t list soil composition of the place where X marks the spot. Think of your outline as a treasure map. “There’s the cliff shaped like a horse’s head. There’s the cluster of cacti. There’s the old ghost town. There’s the creek with the giant rock.”

Add the desperadoes with black hats and snake tattoos when you’re writing. All you need to know is where you’re going to find them.

They’re probably on your index card. X marks the spot.

A final note: there are a lot of really expensive pieces of computer software out there that help with the process.

Don’t waste your money.

You can’t spread out a computer program on the kitchen table and rearrange scenes. You can’t scribble in the margins of your monitor. A pen, a spiral notebook, and index cards run less than a dollar, total. You’ve probably got them lying around your house. (Check that junk drawer in the kitchen.)

It’s very tempting as a new writer to do anything but actually write. And these elaborate programs allow one to spend hours and days and weeks and months feeling productive without actually producing anything.

Pen and paper — it’s fast and effective.

Now get to writing. X marks the spot, and that treasure’s not going to dig up itself.

D.B. Grady is the author of Red Planet Noir.
He can be found on the web at http://www.dbgrady.com.

8 Comment(s)

  1. On Mar 15, 2010, D.B. Grady said:

    I’m delighted to see that autocorrect changed the word “cardstock” to “yardstick.” Just so you all know, I was not drinking at the time.

  2. On Mar 15, 2010, Sara Deurell said:

    Good post – again. :) I don’t outline in much detail at all, but I agree that having at least a rudimentary idea of the overall plot is important – and if I wrote mysteries, I’d have a billion notes. Haha!

    I’ve started thinking about writing a novel the same way I think about doing a realistic graphite drawing: You have to get the sketch right before you start filling in the details and the shading. Make sure your perspective, scale, proportions, etc are right before you move on. It’s a LOT harder to fix those problems once you’ve set down the shading than it is when you’re just working with an outline.

  3. On Mar 15, 2010, Marian Allen said:

    Love it! I do better with outlining using index cards, too. Hands-on, see the shape, shuffle the bits.
    MA

  4. On Apr 9, 2010, Christine Ashworth said:

    Good post!

    I tried index cards – I kept losing them. My office is terribly disorganized but whenever I go to clean it, I feel I’m wasting time (I could be writing, you know!).

    I am picking up new techniques that help me rewrite after I’ve written the first draft, so that’s a step in the right direction. I’m thinking my next novel will be sort of planned out prior to the writing – but only sort of.

    Thanks!

  5. On Apr 9, 2010, Suzanne Johnson said:

    Great post! I haven’t tried the index cards, but because I’m working on a series with ongoing story lines for several characters, I do a color-coded very general outline. Helps me make sure my “blue” character’s plot gets spread evenly through the book. Colored index cards would work too!

  6. On Apr 9, 2010, Maria said:

    I love outlines. Outlines are to writing what maps are to road trips.

    With a map in the car, you can always follow the truck with the elephant in the back to see where it may lead. I’d hate to miss a circus simply because I might not know how to get back on the road to the city.

    Thanks for the post!

  7. On Apr 10, 2010, Laurie London said:

    Great post, DB!

    As someone who doesn’t typically do an outline, I like your non-detailed approach. I tend to retro-outline. Except for the major plot points, I discover the story as I’m writing it. Then I’ll create a plot board or do index cards to see if the story has holes, weak spots, wrong scene placement, etc.

    But I like your logic and may give pre-outlining another try. I think my inner-Kirk would be comforted to know my inner-Spock is looking out for him.

    Thanks!

  8. On Apr 10, 2010, Gabriella Hewitt said:

    I would love to pick up a set of index cards, but they don’t sell them here in Japan. :-) It’s one of those items I always think I should pick up when I’m visiting the US, only never do.

    I think every writer has to find what works for them, and often it’s trial and error to figure that out. I work with a partner and we discovered that doing a chapter outline helps us. It’s simply a general breakdown of what will happen in each chapter including goal, motivation and conflict. Over the winter holidays we used such an outline to write a novella in three weeks. We look at it as a road map. It’s not always perfect but it gets us where we’re going.

    Thanks for a great post.

    Patrizia, one half of the GH writing team
    Excitement, Suspense, Passion
    http://www.GabriellaHewitt.com

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